This morning I was inspired by a “Just the opening line” flash fiction challenge by Chuck Wendig over at terribleminds.com. I had just been thinking about that on my drive into the office. Where does this new dream start. It’s not quite an R dream and I won’t go into details here, but there is a lot of mixed desires in it.
Here is the opening line I submitted at Flash Fiction Challenge: Just The Opening Line:
“After loosing everything last year, I never would of thought that my nightmare inspired screams of torment would change my existence again.”
Is it catchy?
The story is a combination of elements from every other vampire story out there, however don’t loose hope there is one part that is original (at least I think so). I’m not going to write the story out here, but I will give you a little tease by providing a partial summary.
After loosing her family, June threw herself into her hobbies. Surprisingly it wasn’t cats, but technology. She turned her small apartment into a Smart Home of sorts. She used open source bits and pieces. Along with Kinect and multi-touch technology, she was able to setup a fully functioning security system that included automated answering services.
This is where the dream started and I became a little obsessed with the technology, but I’m saving the Smart House blog post topic for later. I started to get bored with June hanging in her Smart House isolated from the world, so I threw at her some strangers.
June had a nightmare about her family drowning and awoke screaming desperately for help. She could not get back to sleep, until she put on loud metal music and pushed the ear buds into place. She soon fell back to sleep with a pillow over her head.
At the front door of June’s house two officers approached, called by a worried neighbor. The door scanned the closest and found them on file as an officer and granted emergency access levels. This gave the cop the ability to view the house plans and camera’s from the front door touch panel. It also gave them the ability to override the lock controls and enter the house.
They knocked several times and even tried the open communication feature to call out to those within the house. When they got no response they started looking through the camera views. They saw June in bed, unmovable, with a pillow over her head. Worried that there may have been a homicide the cops entered her house, approached her room, and carefully pushed the pillow aside.
I am officially getting into to much details so I need to step this back a level.
June awoke and kindly explained to the officers about her night terrors. She fixed them a cup of coffee and let them tell her how wonderful her Smart House is. Officer Sullone and Officer Larkin looked like brothers, with their blond hair and high check bones. June felt the attraction to them, but ignored it just as she had been doing for a year.
As they were leaving they exchanged looks and a node from Larkin. Officer Sullone took a hold of June by the wrist and quickly twisted her around so that she was now between the two of them and her back pinned against Sullone’s chest. He pulled at her chin to extend her neck and whispered in her ear to sooth any words stuck in her throat.
Office Larkin leaned in and took a long sniff of her neck line. Then placed a small kiss near her jaw. Sullone released his grip, put catching her before she fell further to the ground. June had lost her footing with that kiss. The two Officers proceeded to leave to file there reports regarding her incident, leaving her completely baffled.
I just want to write the whole story, but you don’t have time to read the whole thing. So here is the REALLY summed up version.
The officers are vampires. June smells really good. They collected her and bind her (means they own her). They decide to enter her into the vampire court auction. She causes a ruckus. She is sold to be killed. King vampire spares her before the end. He reads human minds. She is re-bound to the King. She gets spoiled, but causes war. Her independence and blood changes the hidden vampire world.
Death is only the beginning! Right?